Review My Startup Idea for Biz Competition

1 points by djsamson 13 years ago | 1 comment

I am taking part in a business plan competition at my college next week and I was wondering if HN could give me some feedback on my landing page: www.MailTheHouse.com

Basically, I want to create a web and mobile application where people can write a formal letter they want to their State/Federal representatives but mail it using the internet. I'm going to have an automatic printer and have someone who will manually fold/stuff envelopes. My goal is to secure advocacy groups as my clients and allow them to coordinate mass mail campaigns.

What do you think?

mi3law 13 years ago |

I would change this "MailTheHouse.com will find your representative, print and then mail your letter for you so contacting your rep is as easy as sending an e-mail" into series of 2-3 bullet points. Emphasize the "finds your representative point"-- I doubt many people know who their reps are so this value prop. will be especially interesting.

Also, consider just collecting the email to reduce sign-up friction (or make it very clear that the first/last names are optional).

Very cool idea by the way-- is this to be a social for-profit? A non-profit? How do you plan on making money? Just curious.